"Knocked at the door there was a gentle and rhythmic knock at the door.An old man wears glasses, dressed in a black quilted jacket, and a pair of black trousers, wearing slippers, he is reading a newspaper, thought: less guest in the home, who is likely to be?Open the door a look, wow!Son, daughter-in-law, grandson, granddaughter came back, old man looked at them happy!
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