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题目为父母榜样的力量的作文

77分
2025-11-14 14:36:47

题目为父母榜样的力量的作文

Directions:

Write an essay of 160—200 words based on the following picture in your essay, you should

1. describe the pictures briefly,

2. interpret its intended meaning, and

3. give your comments.

You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

参考范文:

As is vividly depicted in the first picture there is a father watching TV and asking his son to study hard, with his son being unable to concentrate on his study. The second picture portrays that the son and the father are studying hard together. At the lower part of the picture is a caption which implies that it is wise for parents to set a good example for their children by action rather than by words.

It occurs to me that the author of the drawing aims at reminding us of the the value of a good example by parents. First and foremost, examples speak louder than words, for it is widely accepted that an example enables each person to transform his or her aspirations from a state of potentiality into reality. Put it another way, parents’ example enables their children to improve them selves, so they can be qualified for the future job, be ready for the forthcoming life, and they are likely to achieve more fulfillment. Furthermore, according to a latest survey conducted by an authority on the Internet, the majority of people interviewed answer that parents’ action produces more positive influence on the growth of their children than oral requirements do.

Hence, it is vital for us to derive positive implications from the above pictures. For one thing, we should frequently use it to enlighten young parents. For another, we should cultivate the awareness of parents that personal examples are very vital to kid’s growth. Only by doing so can children grow sound in body and mind.

【题目为父母榜样的力量的作文】

写作思路解析

文章中心清晰明确,全程围绕核心立意行文,借助委婉含蓄的托物寄情传递所思所想不断丰富内容层次,语言朴素简约,却蕴藏直击人心的力量,越品读越有味道。全文紧扣主题,极少偏离。素材、细节、感悟全部服务中心,写作目标清晰明确。

本文范文仅作写作思路参考,请勿直接照搬抄袭用于作业投稿。

作文打分:77分(满分100)

改进建议

构思文章布局时增加小伏笔与前后呼应。学会多角度审视事件,拓展思考广度。集中笔墨打造一处高潮场景,打破平淡结构,加深读者印象。

综合点评

文字风格清爽朴实,阅读感受轻松舒适,适合日常习作。内容体量充足,素材支撑有力。详略把控存在短板,关键情节笔墨偏少,次要内容占用过多篇幅,主次辨识度不足。

作文优点

拥有基础的详略意识,能够区分主次内容,重点情节适当展开。语句通顺,语病较少,整体行文干净清爽。

存在不足

!语言偏口语化,书面表达能力有待加强。重点情节一笔带过,没有充分展开刻画,难以形成记忆点。

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