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2025-03-08 20:48:11
Dec 22, 2015 TUE
RainyI just wanna talk a little bit about Xmas.You guys know what Xmas is?Xmas=Christmas.Haha,merry christmas everybody!People always associate Xmas with the gifts.So what do you want for christmas?Ipad,toys,or iphone8?Haha just kidding.If you know nothing but have interest in it,you should take a good look at the following words.
Christmas Day is a holiday in many butnot all the countries.AndChristmas celebrates the birth of Jesus Christ, who Christians believe is the son of God.Many western families willdecorate their houses with Christmas trees and other decorations in the weeks leading up to Christmas Day.It's a special time when children get presents from parents and Santa Claus.We also have many activities for Christmas not just exchanging gifts.Such as giving Christmas cards,singing Christmas songs,going to parties and so on.There are some special activities for Xmas at school like serving others,exploring other cultures,etc.
Christmas is a perfect opportunity for us to get involved in a community service project.Andit is also a time for giving, and helping out those in need is particularly rewarding.In addition,wecan learn about Christmas by exploring how it is celebrated by others.I know that chinese people do not celebrate Christmas as a traditional festival.Although they exchange gifts and do some special things at Christmas,it is just aentertainment for them.Finally,Christmasisapproaching andIwishyouall Merry Christmasin advance!

初二:Sarah

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