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2025-09-23 09:11:10 字数:

As computer and Internet are increasing entering ordinary people, in addition to the development of scientific technology, more and more online games are available and popular among people, especially the youngsters. However, this phenomenon brings a lot of worries to many parents and teachers in that many students who have lower self-discipline are addicted to the games and indulge into these games too much, which affects their health and academic performance.

But on the other hand, some people point out that online games are not good for nothing. They argue that playing online games can help the player practice their reaction capacity, which is good for forming prompt and responsive thinking. In addition, the players can temporarily release from the great pressure in work and study and enjoy themselves when playing online games.

From my point of view, I think playing games is not a bad choice of indoor relaxation for those who have high self-discipline. But for those who have no enough self-controlled ability, it is not wise to try to play these games.

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