In a candy family, there were a group of happy children. They made candy by themselves and these candies would bring happiness to others. Their expectations were just for everyone to taste the candy of happiness,and these candies are not expensive and they didn’t have an extremely gorgeous package . Therefore, the whole town child would come to this candy family at the weekend. These happy children could always come up with fancyways to make each of candies different. One day,a famous achiever came here to find happiness. He found the chief and asked :“where is the happiness?” The chief’ words weren’t explicit :“In your heart.” The achiever felt puzzled then picked up a blue candy and contain it in his mouth. He aftertaste for a long time and remembered some happy things. He undersood : Being happy is actually simple , the true self and the optimistic state of mind is the messenger of happiness . If you keep happy ,you’ll be a real winner.
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