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英语作文我的姐姐

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2025-11-07 19:25:34

英语作文范文我的姐姐

In everyone’s life, most people have some experience and career which are affected by someone. It is difficult for you to forget them and what they affected you because they have taught you something of importance in your life, also it changed your life. It is difficult for me to forget that my older sister who is 4year older than me has taught me something which were important in my life.

It is fortunate thing for me that I have two sisters, and they are all my loved ones. When I was child, I was jealous of another children who have older brother. When they got some trouble with other another children who has no older brother, they let their older brother to help them and they always got win even though they were wrong. This thought was ridiculous when I recognized that having an older sister is wonderful thing for me especially when I was youth.

In my memory, my older sister was a pretty and not tall girl when she was in high school, and she had two long braids. She got a job when she just graduated for senior high school because my mother’s health was not in good situation and she though that she should earn some money to reduce my parents afford. I was in junior high school when she got her job. I was clever and excellent student when I was in elementary school. But when I was in junior high school, everything was totally changed, I was also clever but I could not get good grade, I was confused and disappointment. My sister advised me to change my study method. She told me that you should not think that finishing your homework is only one thing you need to do after school. You are in high school now, you need to study your textbook more and think about some question more. In order to help me to do it effectively, she studied with me and explained some question for me after her work.

The time flied quickly, I finished my high school and went to the university to be a under graduate student. Four years later, I graduated and began to find my job. First, I want to find a job in my hometown because I really missed my family. My younger sister who was a member of military lived far from my hometown; then I wanted to take care my parents with my sister. My old sister’s health had asthma, I afraid that she could take care my parents when my parents got older and older. When I told my plan to my family, my parents agreed with me especially my mother. I knew that my mother agreed with me was not because she wanted me to take care her. She really missed me very much and she also wanted her all daughters lived near with her. But my older sister insisted on letting me find a job in Beijing and she persuaded my parents to give up their ideas. She told us that living together was a good thing for a family, but more important thing than living together was that you would have more chance to use your knowledge and to give free rein to do something. Actually, she did not think that it was a good thing that most of us to live in this small town. Finally, we accepted her idea and I tried my best to find a good job in Beijing.

My older sister is not a higheducated person, but she really gave me some good suggestions and help in my life. She always tells me that our parents and she are good, and does not let me to worry about my family too much. She also is a strong woman, and I rear to find that she cried. One time I asked her what was her last cry, and I got a surprising answer. She cried when she got a job and she knew that she could not go to university anymore. Now, when I have some question and I am depressed, the first thing that I do is calling my sister. Sometimes, we only talked about our parents and her family, but I could feel better after I heard her voice.

【英语作文范文我的姐姐】

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