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英语作文:元旦晚会

85分
2025-10-30 18:19:24

英语作文范文:元旦晚会

Section II on Friday afternoon class, long-awaited New Year‘s party officially started!

Class did not use the color bars and other decorative bells and whistles too, but posted in each window of the bars and I think these little decorated than the other classes Rounds. The rescheng of the class seats are also a bit in the middle leaving a lot of neutral gear, give the students performances. Because I came relatively late, sitting in the last: (.

New Year‘s Day party started, and Ning-Ling and Zhou Zhengyang come for a very boring speech. Finally, the first on the program began. Programs are more, I can not describe each of the following I will highlight a number of given me a deep impression on the program bar.

Zhou Zhengyang walked classroom center, said with a smile: Here, there are requests I Zhengrong, Hu Yi-dong, Wang BenBen, DONG Bing-sing for our speech that we are very familiar pop songs - Pungent . Thunderous applause, students They are excited, and some even knock on the table when the drum. They are four you push me, I pull you will come up. Four lined type, a man sang a has begun. Days, they are too timid, and even dare to sing Jay Chou‘s song, not to mention classes and Wang Jia Lao teachers are at the scene, how they dare to sing? ! Hu Yi-dong made a start gun, he did not sing loud noise, but the first one to eat crab people need courage; the second is king Ben Ben, he changed the past of the fierce, turned into a very shy of男孩. His singing voice is too small, like a mosquito called, I heard not seen; followed by DONG Bing, Although he usually is a very shy boy, could be a singing, Pungent That changed, he was very involved in singing They have even used the body language, aroused laughter; finally I Zhengrong, he was most unlucky, he sang the lyrics is that, so he almost did not come out to sing. In any case, they are still very courageous, and an end, I forget the previous scores, take the lead to give them applauded. Because they have the head, back, and Zan Wu Ching-hui brazenly sang on Jolin Tsai‘s Thirty-Six Stratagems of love.

There is also a program is performing sketches Gong contingent. She speaks of the vivid, very funny, and she mimics the voice of an old township 8, really, as it is the opposite! Her performance won the rounds of applause and laughter, I really worthy of a female comedy king!

Time off really fast, turned away for New Year‘s Day party is over. I‘m sorry, but am glad to primary and secondary school age the last New Year‘s Day party is the most significant

【英语作文范文:元旦晚会】

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作文打分:85分(满分100)

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