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生命中有价值的事高考英语作文

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2025-09-26 08:44:59

生命中有价值的事高考英语作文

what is the most valuable thing in one’s life? i think there would be different answer for different person. there is no doubt that money is a necessary approach to make your dream come to true. what we want to do with the money is of cause to purchase the most valuable thing in our lives, in other words, the dreams.

a house could offer you a place to live to make you feel warm and safe and a business maybe return you more money, but for me, a common person with no wild ambition but only like to live a common life and do some research that i am interested in, a house is more valuable than a business.if i have a house even it’s small i will feel safe and i can do anything that i want to and needn’t to struggle difficultly to earn my living because the house could give me a free space that belongs to myself. but a business is no use for me because i don’t need much more money and don’t know how to do with it. in my own house, i could read books, listen to music, write something and have a break in my bed if i feel tired. i can do cooking with my friends and watch tv together. it would be a happy time in a warm house. but what does a business mean? i think it would be communicating with strangers, going here and there and hardly stop, bargaining with that kind of artificial and sophisticated business men and so on. maybe these are not the whole results of purchasing a business but in no way i could say i like that.

so i would like to buy a house if i have enough money but never mention to a business because the former is my dream but the later is no meaning for me.

【生命中有价值的事高考英语作文】

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作文打分:80分(满分100)

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