It is a special day today. My mother sent one hundred basket of red bayberries. I like to eat red bayberries. It tastes nice. When they arrived in Shanghai, they were still fresh. But most of them would be sent to my mother’s business friends. I chose the best basket of red bayberries to eat. I put the rest in my refrigerator. Red bayberry is my hometown’s special product. It is well-known in china. Many people like to eat it. joozone.com 2010年1月16号
这是一个特殊的日子今天。我的母亲寄100红bayberries篮子。我喜欢吃红bayberries。味道不错。当他们来到上海,但他们仍记忆犹新。但是,其中大部分将被派往我母亲的商界的朋友。我选择了最好的红色bayberries篮子吃。我把我的冰箱的休息。杨梅是我的故乡的特殊产品。这是着名的中国。许多人喜欢吃它。
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